Changes to the new plot

As a group, we have sat down and understood where we could have improved on our anamatic, from this we have discovered that changes need to take place with our plot, here are the ideas which we as a group have come up with:

• First shot is of the mum, Jack and Emily sat around the dinner table sat around playing a game and joking around (seems to be an average single parent family

·         Close up of Jacks saying “yes, I won a hotel!"

·         Over the shoulder of the mums face as she says “Oh that reminds I’m going on a spa weekend next week, so you’ll have to stay and look after Emily.” They respond with “Ok”

·         Cut to a close-up shot of Emily’s eye looking out of the shadows, she is cowering under the stairs, her eye suggests that she is frightened.

·         Jump cuts to a shot of Jacks arm reaching round the stairs, Emily cowers further in.

·         He then jumps out saying “Found you!”

·         She leaps into his arms and clings onto him in a strange way, she sharply exhales to show that she is relieved.

·         Fades into the living room where Emily is stroking/holding Jacks jumper (leaning against each other in a comforting and protective way)

·         His girlfriend enters the living room and as Jack gets up to give her a hug, Emily grabs hold of his Jumper.

·         When he says “Let go Emily” she reluctantly releases before looking away sad.

·         Cuts to a shot of Jack stood by the door, you can hear a drunken man outside loudly, before Jack says “Not again Dad!”

·         Cuts to a shot of Emily stood in the doorway saying “Jack who’s there?”

·         The Dad recognises her voice and shots out Emily with anger laced in his tone.

·         Her face changes to frightened as Jack says “Go” she runs and hides in her usual spot under the stairs.

·         You hear shouting from the drunken dad before he screams, “I’ll be back for you two!” and smashes a bottle

·         Emily cries under the stairs

·         Cuts to when the mum leaves to go on the spa weekend

·         Jack invites his friends around. 

·         Emily suggests playing hide and seek

·         As Emily is counting it cuts to a flash back where she is cowering and pleading for her dad to stop

·         Jack heroically steps in and says “Stop dad!”

·         As she is counting down there are a variety of different shots.

·         Flash shots of:

§  Emily looking around

§  Mirror/shadows shown

§  Door slamming behind Emily, Jack is frantically trying to get in.

§  Running scene of Amy running up the stairs.

§  Lauren and Jack stood in the kitchen behind the table as the lights flicker off

§  Lauren finds Amy strangled in a room.

§  Two shot of Jack and Tom hiding under the table, Jack says to “shh” as they hear a loud bang.

§  Dragging shot of Tom (extreme close-up of his hands)

·         Final shot is a medium close up of Emily crying as she’s rubbing her neck, she has the same strangled marks as Amy had (unclear whether it is present time or a flashback.)